May 06, 2012

Wrong Timing?


After two months, back with my entry for Saturday Centus at Jenny Matlock's blog...any genre, P.G as far as possible, not to exceed 100 words plus the prompt in bold.. Check the other pleasure trips there.

The interview had held a lot of promise, one of the better ones she had given in recent times. Nevertheless, waiting for the elusive call was unnerving. She went about the everyday chores, no longer languorous. The meals were planned,  their calorie content checked, examined her closet, deeming most of the clothes as good enough for office wear. She checked her inbox a dozen times a day. The phone went everywhere she went. Today, at lunch, a beep was heard. She unlocked the screen in nervous excitement. The message read, “It is our pleasure to invite you to Exhale holiday homes, nature awaits.”

13 comments:

Michael Offutt, Tebow Cult Initiate said...

I like this piece that you've written. I'm wondering why she has to check the calorie content. Is she obsessed with her weight? There are so many hooks in the paragraph that hint at a much deeper character, perhaps with some obsessive neurosis.

Thank you so much for the extensive comment you left on my blog. I love that kind of communication, and I shall be visiting here often.

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Very good, Rek!

Judie said...

Rek!! Glad to see you back! This is a great take on the prompt. As for the calorie count, I think many people are more health-conscious these days.

anitamombanita said...

Ugh...timing is everything. Great spin on the prompt!

A said...

Oh I think Blogger just lost my comment... anyway, I was thinking I'd love to be the recipient of that text message :-)

Dreaming said...

Wonderful! I love the build up.... and yes - exhalation in frustration!

Karen S. said...

Oh I do like where you went with this! Nicely done....!

M Pax said...

This was a great nugget, Rek. Makes me want to know more about her and what's going on.

Bikramjit said...

its such a lovely feeling when one gets something like that :)

Bikram's

Cherie Reich said...

Wonderful piece! I hope everything works out well for the character. There's so much characterization in this short piece. :)

Li said...

Tells a lot about the character - and leaves us with a mystery :-)

Judee said...

You definitely captured the feeling of waiting on important news, I felt the buzz of nervous energy. I was expecting good news with that phone, you surprised me - and I felt such sympathy, cause it is so like the kind of thing to happen!

Jenny said...

What's going on with her?

Doesn't she own any elastic waist skirts? I mean, seriously. Waiting and anxiety just seem to go hand in hand with eating the wrong things!

Hope verything is okay with you!

I missed your creative writing.

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